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- blabbler
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Thanks for the comments everyone - unfortunately I'm itching to start another one (I really enjoyed making this, and I've only used crops, fades, wipes, and zooming slightly on the beats so far. I want to try some masking and rotoscoping now...)
Please, please, if you've got a minute to spare, take a look at my video and let me know what I should work on - anything you don't like, or feels weird, please tell me.
I appreciate that from a technical standpoint, it's necessarily lacking, since I'm just feeling my way at the moment, but any comments will help me improve my next one.
Please, please, if you've got a minute to spare, take a look at my video and let me know what I should work on - anything you don't like, or feels weird, please tell me.
I appreciate that from a technical standpoint, it's necessarily lacking, since I'm just feeling my way at the moment, but any comments will help me improve my next one.
- blabbler
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Re-Mastered!
Just a note that i've re-mastered the same video to a sensible 15mb for the bandwidth-impaired, and removed the annoying blended frames, which premiere helpfully added for me.
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- CrackTheSky
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I'm just going to pretty much parrot what everyone's already said, minus anything bad about the length, which I dug. The simple effects you used worked really well with the music and helped the flow a great deal, plus they just looked cool, the text was very well-implemented, and the feeling of this video was just right. I am very much looking forward to future videos from you 
5/5

5/5
- blabbler
- Joined: Fri Nov 09, 2007 8:26 am
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Thanks very muchCrackTheSky wrote:...
5/5

I'm trying to mask stuff in photoshop with the pen tool atm. Bugger me, it takes some patience...
Originally I not only wanted the characters' extremities to stick out of the frames, but also wanted that chick at the beginning isolated from the animated background...
I even had a stab at masking everything with animated garbage mattes in premiere...

PS the backwards-exploding-satchel-charge-sequence in your recent video is friggin' awesome. I can't believe how effectively it drew me into the vid.
Must take notes...

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Dude, that was sweet! Especially for a first video. I really liked the composition of your shots, I mean, there are editors who have been around for ages, but when they use cropping/squares/shapes their arrangement looks quite crappy. I especially like the slice-the-screen-parts! So it looked quite nicely and fitting too!
I do have some criticism: the text seems a bit useless, I think the "by babbler" could've been replaced by a sentence that would be more fitting to the theme, especially because it's such a short AMV. And even if you choose to put your name, I think that there should be a seperation between the title and the by babbler" part, which could easily be done with a different size or color.
The zoom-ins of the cropped parts looked a bit cheesy to me (the last part with the orange line did look good though). If you can keep the flow going by the arrangement of your cuts and the rhythm, those stuff (zoom-ins, blurs, flashes, etc.) are unnecessary to put in (often) - at least that's my opinion (and I know a lot of people don't agree with me).
And last thing, in 0:04-0:05 there's a part that's left blanc for too long, making a gap in the flow. This could be easily remedied by letting the character on screen for some longer time and move the screen to the left/right/whatever side to keep the flow going.
But all in all very nice, I don't think I've ever been so enthousiastic about a newcomer!
I do have some criticism: the text seems a bit useless, I think the "by babbler" could've been replaced by a sentence that would be more fitting to the theme, especially because it's such a short AMV. And even if you choose to put your name, I think that there should be a seperation between the title and the by babbler" part, which could easily be done with a different size or color.
The zoom-ins of the cropped parts looked a bit cheesy to me (the last part with the orange line did look good though). If you can keep the flow going by the arrangement of your cuts and the rhythm, those stuff (zoom-ins, blurs, flashes, etc.) are unnecessary to put in (often) - at least that's my opinion (and I know a lot of people don't agree with me).
And last thing, in 0:04-0:05 there's a part that's left blanc for too long, making a gap in the flow. This could be easily remedied by letting the character on screen for some longer time and move the screen to the left/right/whatever side to keep the flow going.
But all in all very nice, I don't think I've ever been so enthousiastic about a newcomer!
- blabbler
- Joined: Fri Nov 09, 2007 8:26 am
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Egomaniac, guilty as chargedDouggie wrote:...
I do have some criticism: the text seems a bit useless, I think the "by babbler" could've been replaced by a sentence that would be more fitting to the theme, especially because it's such a short AMV. And even if you choose to put your name, I think that there should be a seperation between the title and the by babbler" part, which could easily be done with a different size or color.


It was just supposed to say 'be... lucky'. But I think I messed it up by not using the same font for the 'be' as the 'lucky'.
That's the kind of stuff I need to hear. Watching it again I can agree that there are, if not too many bumps and flashes, they're definitely very obtrusive, a bit of subtlety would probably go a long way... there are definitely some abrupt cuts to black that look silly.Douggie wrote:The zoom-ins of the cropped parts looked a bit cheesy to me (the last part with the orange line did look good though). If you can keep the flow going by the arrangement of your cuts and the rhythm, those stuff (zoom-ins, blurs, flashes, etc.) are unnecessary to put in (often) - at least that's my opinion (and I know a lot of people don't agree with me).
Yeah, at this point I had exported a series of 30 frames with the girl turning to face the camera with her hair held back. I tried masking it with garbage mattes, then using the magic wand (I know, I know... pen ftwDouggie wrote:And last thing, in 0:04-0:05 there's a part that's left blanc for too long...

Anyway, I thought 'sod it', and tried to time the white box to the singer's breath sounds.
Douggie wrote:But all in all very nice, I don't think I've ever been so enthousiastic about a newcomer!
