I don't suppose you had any way to get sound clips of stuff colliding and people panicking? It would have made the train scene sound a lot fuller and more realistic.
I still say that everything between the alarm clock and the really dramatic music could stand to be louder; I had to turn my WMP volume up far more than for most videos in order to be able to make out all the lines.
Video quality could easily be better. The one scene that stands out to me is the one with the girl in yellow right before the title "To become more human" -- there's noticeable noise on the edges.
And when the music suddenly stops, there ought to be some kind of big impact in the visuals to coincide with it... it might even help to cover up the obvious musical edit.
You gave me the impression that the doctor's voice was going to fade into the girl's on that last line... I was looking forward to that.
The titles are better than with B.S., but there's still nothing distinctive about the font. Impact, am I right?
I see I've had a name change since the last one... also, who's "Ryan Van Ausd<b>le</b>n", and what's "disgresion"?
On the plus side, the whole second half is really nicely edited, though I personally could have done with one or two fewer closeups of Ayato. The music and the imagery go great together IMO.
Also, it's much more engaging than the last one. As I already told you, there's a very nice buildup that makes you really want to see where it's going, and I had no problems with the climax (except the aforementioned lack of a hard cut or something on that last orchestral hit).
Oh yeah, perhaps the most obvious problem: it's not widescreen.
Anyway, hope this helps... and please, run your title screens by your beta testers in the future.
