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ZephyrStar
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Post by ZephyrStar » Wed Oct 17, 2007 7:28 am

:O:O:O
(will comment after worktimes)

*edit*

The first video I really liked a lot. Great timing and mixture of characters, and I really like your comp in the beginning and the end with the video tiles. Good job. As for the song, I was really digging it till the guy started to sing, but that's my problem I guess :)

The second vid not so much...I guess I may have had to have seen the show to identify with it, but technically very solid. Now I'm interested in that show :O

All around, great job, good stuffs.
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Post by CodeZTM » Wed Oct 17, 2007 9:17 am

You know, I saw TIMELESS and I was kinda hoping for a Loveless vid. Aw... But at least you have Howl! *downloads*

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Post by omegaevolution » Wed Oct 17, 2007 10:15 am

:o

ok I really liked ED, very enjoyable flow and editing overall. ZOMG a romance/sentimental vid that I enjoyed? :shock: . Well I guess the song helped in that XD. I liked the work with the effects you did at the begining and ending of the AMV, very well executed. Overall me aproves :up:

4.5/5

Timeless: Well first the song was a turn down for me, especially the begining of the song :(. Editing was nice all around, but this one felt like the average romance/sentimental AMV. Still good work on this one as well :), the story was cute.

3/5

very solid work Danielle :D
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Post by Chiikaboom » Wed Oct 17, 2007 10:57 am

:O

i shall get once im out of school in 6 hours.
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Post by jade_eyed_angel » Wed Oct 17, 2007 11:07 am

O:
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Post by CrackTheSky » Wed Oct 17, 2007 11:17 am

Hokay, honesty time.

Efflorescent Dawn:
I've felt this way since I first saw it on the Pro disc: It feels really hollow. Basically the entire time I'm watching this video I feel like you're just trying to take a bunch of cheap shots at my emotions by using angsty scene after angsty scene without any real purpose. I mean, the editing in this video is spectacular as always, the scene selection just feels predictable, shallow, and disconnected. It's hard for me to connect with the video at all really. Maybe it's just me, this video just feels like it could have been something a lot more.

Also, all sarcasm aside, the climax is really disappointing. I mean, you had what, like 15 anime to choose from, and you chose one of the single most overused climax scenes in the history of AMVs.

3/5

Timeless:
This is the better video, in my opinion. What I like about this one a lot is that it showcases your ability to use simple editing techniques effectively, and as a storytelling video without any real effects this is a pretty nice video. I have a few gripes, though, one of which is that the video seems to drag until about halfway/two-thirds through when the conflict in the story actually arises. It's kinda boring up until then because it's the same scenes over and over for two and a half minutes - there's only so much you can show of two people being in love before it gets repetitive. Cutting the song may have helped. My other problem - and one I'll go into more detail about when I write your op - is that this video would have hit me WAY harder emotionally if you had portrayed a tragic ending instead of a happy one. And I mean WAY harder.

As it stands though, this is a good romance/drama video - not your best (neither are, IMO), but much above average.

4/5

So in general, do I think you're improving? To answer simply, no, I don't. You've kind of come to a standstill and I think the big reason is because you keep doing the same kinds of videos over and over. If you experiment and do other genres - hell, you could even stay within drama, just drop the romance front - I think you'll really amaze me like you did the first time I saw Raging Sorrow. So I'm waiting for that.

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Post by JenCM18 » Wed Oct 17, 2007 11:18 am

Oooooo me have to downloads!
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Post by Nessephanie » Wed Oct 17, 2007 1:16 pm

You already know that I luffles the Efflorescent Dawn <3<3

I'll watch the other at a later time, I plan to make a Hantsuki vid myself, so I dun wanna watch yours yet :3

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Post by Koopiskeva » Wed Oct 17, 2007 1:30 pm

erectile dysfunction? |:

Good times.
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Post by Kristyrat » Wed Oct 17, 2007 2:13 pm

Ileia wrote:You of course realize that a double-release will get you kicked out of VNS, right? You won't be allowed to release another video for 6 months!
Actually, we removed that rule when I posted my double release however the hell long ago that was. :amv:

(Also, commenting on videos once I get back to rez :O)
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