Got around to watching your video a few more times, and just some things to watch for:
I'd look over the timing on the sequence between the 'SOS' flashing and the time when that really good glass door shot comes in (about :40 to 2:30) It seems all the new sequences are very smoothly edited, but those in-between parts I have some reservations about - especially how the cuts and transitions are timed. Especially, note these parts:
:50 - :58,
a pop frame at 1:04 (!),
some jerky movement with the guy floating around 1:12,
fades to black from 1:17 to 1:20 and 1:23 to 1:26,
scene changes at 1:45 and 1:46 (they seem to be a split-second too late)
1:48 - 1:55,
a shaky-looking frame around 2:00,
2:14 - 2:17.
Not to say I don't agree with the editing choices, just take a look there and make sure the timing is lined up as closely as you can get it.
I gotta say though, the farther that video goes, the better it seems to get
