PSME part II

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Vale
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PSME part II

Post by Vale » Wed May 21, 2003 1:00 pm

here is the seconed installment

it has a lot of retorical thinking and flowing stanzas so bear with it.


Sitting in here
waiting time
thinking about
why you lied
why you said
you couldn’t go
knowing me
how did I know
I saw you there
With everyone else
Can’t imagine how I felt
Then my dreams
Were crushed and gone
Turn away then
Must be strong
But I am weak
In my head
Anger starts to flare up red
I start to run
Then I see
What you really
Meant to me
Nothing more than everything
Is exactly what I mean
But now you’re done
And you left
Now you tell me
Who’s the best
Who’s the worst
In their way
Lying here where I lay
I can’t mind
We had our time
All that’s left
Can wonder why
You start to see
All of me
Hide your eyes behind the veil
Out of sight
Feelings stale
Remember how
You forgot to care
Then the Id begins to tear
I don’t see
What to be
All I've really known was me
Never again
Will I ask when
I’ve changed
From now to then
Time to leave
Start to see
All my blood begin to seethe
Hemroging
From my heart
It was you
from the start
again you’re blown
whereabouts unknown
has your skull now turned from stone
or was it lead
in your bed
wonder why I just fled
I couldn’t take
What you gave
Sorry but I refuse to scathe
Not normal
Different than
Not like your average man
That’s not true
I’m just a boy
Never had to employ
All the skills
I never had
That I ran I am glad
Then again can’t help but tank
From you to thank
Don’t mind to try
Understand how I think
Words were said
Swollen head
Didn’t know
was being led
like a man
with his own was
searching for a face
erased by days
but it’s too late
to just take
advantage of
what we make
we walk in May
this fateful day
and leave each other far away


tell me what you think
later
im sorry, i retrect the last statment.

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Post by Lone Wolf » Wed May 21, 2003 1:24 pm

Nice... :)

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Post by Vale » Fri May 23, 2003 10:48 pm

[/rant] You all suck except lone wolf. Would it kill you to take 30 seconds to type good or bad and post. Whats wrong with you people! [rant/]
im sorry, i retrect the last statment.

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well

Post by Freako » Sat May 24, 2003 1:20 am

bad post ... waste of time .. loser ... we dont suck (you suck) .... did i mention loser ... oops 4 seconds left .... better finish my senten........................................................................................................................................................................

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Post by yuppa » Sat May 24, 2003 4:48 pm

very good writing, very intelligently wrote. You might need to send writing samples into some magazines for some exposure. you never know what could happen.. :)
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Post by SarahtheBoring » Sun May 25, 2003 1:44 am

Vale wrote:[/rant] You all suck except lone wolf. Would it kill you to take 30 seconds to type good or bad and post. Whats wrong with you people! [rant/]
What's wrong with you, that you need other people to validate your thoughts? Not to be harsh about it, but we are under no obligation to reply to anything.

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Post by Vale » Sun May 25, 2003 12:51 pm

SarahtheBoring wrote:
Vale wrote:[/rant] You all suck except lone wolf. Would it kill you to take 30 seconds to type good or bad and post. Whats wrong with you people! [rant/]
What's wrong with you, that you need other people to validate your thoughts? Not to be harsh about it, but we are under no obligation to reply to anything.
First of all, yes, validation is very important to me. Im not just some starving poet, i cant get by on nothing but a whim. If you read the intro to part 1 you would know that my posting of poems is nothing but an ego-booster. Im not ashamed, nor do i care of what you think of me for it. To the fact that there is no obligation to replys, it is true that you hold no need to do so, yet you feel the need to critizise me for asking other opinions. I do realize i could have gone about to in a more polite manner, and for that i am sorry. It was kind of an impulse post.

later
im sorry, i retrect the last statment.

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