Besides from the obvious connection of the "Animals" part of the song, the video feels really unrelated and disconnected from the lyrics. I also feel that the pace and flow of the song isn't really matching up with your scenes either. And so overall, I feel that you got caught up in the obvious combination of the 2 sources and didn't really build on it any further.
But I do have to commend you on even finding scenes to sync in the video. As someone who is also editing with Monster Musume, I know just how hard it is to get decent scenes that have movement from a lot of the characters. That's partially why I was trying to hold out for a 2nd season before I even started working on mine (with a completely different song btw)

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