I am sorry. But this was awful. some things you should know about AMVs:
Subtitles are absolutely no-no. Crop them away.
High visual quality is preferred. Make sure you compress it without losing much quality, and also use higher quality footage. DVDrips work better than fansubs.
Effects should be integrated better. If you're not good with making effects that look good, then don't use them.
Read about most of the stuff I've menentioned here:
http://www.animemusicvideos.org/guides/ ... index.html