Just a few things:
-A blur would of been better to move into the dream thing.
-Those black bars u used didn't really work for the action part ... using a tv simulator to move the picture around might have worked better.
-You should have used a flash or something more obvious to synch with the bass beat.
-For romance ....that was just sort of annoying.
-Hentai ..WTF! you ruined a perfectly good hentai scene. Same applies to the hentai as the action. Bad bars and random shapes!

The song was ok, footage quality and what not were fine.
-Again, a fade into a scene with konota waking up would of been better, instead of the house. And maybe use a sound effect like when you take the needle off of a record when the song ended.
-Then the outro ... you just picked a random transition didn't u? lol. Would of been cooler to so something like have it close as if you were turning a TV off. OR something :S
Everything else was pretty good

You have pretty good editing skills, good ideas, but work on what you put where.
3/5