Holy fsck, that was awesome.
I can see where not being familiar with Heroic Age would make this a bit complex to understand. Fortunately, having a soft spot for space opera about the size of Jupiter, I
have been watching Heroic Age. So I get what's going on here - it's pretty much the first episode or so. It's the backstory and buildup to the first major battle between Age and the Bronze Tribe.
I have to disagree with Crackers about effects. I think the strength of your impeccably timed editing carries the video extremely well. Effects would only distract from what's going on.
There's only one thing I don't like: the credits image. It's horribly jarring, and breaks the mood something awful.

for that.
For everything else, I

this video to death.