COLORFUL BOX

[pharaoh]

it's my first


feedback pls

[Fall_Child42]

When I saw Original animation, I was hoping for something different then a title card and some 3d motion.

I was totally going to offer you a bunch of advice, but because it's a small thing where you are fooling around with after effects I don't have the knowledge to do so.

Here are the things I noticed could be improved.

The sound effect for the jumping word was not appropriate. The word jumping shouldn't have individual shaking letters if it's going to move as a solid unit regardless Something more organic would have looked better.

The box was colourful.

the edges of the glowy bits extend over the box so during the rotations it's very ugly and 2d looking.

the letters need depth.



With all this I think It's great you are messing around with this stuff, and you should keep at it! It certainly has promise!

[pharaoh]

When I saw Original animation, I was hoping for something different then a title card and some 3d motion.

I was totally going to offer you a bunch of advice, but because it's a small thing where you are fooling around with after effects I don't have the knowledge to do so.

Here are the things I noticed could be improved.

The sound effect for the jumping word was not appropriate. The word jumping shouldn't have individual shaking letters if it's going to move as a solid unit regardless Something more organic would have looked better.

The box was colourful.

the edges of the glowy bits extend over the box so during the rotations it's very ugly and 2d looking.

the letters need depth.



With all this I think It's great you are messing around with this stuff, and you should keep at it! It certainly has promise!

thanks man that was very helpful
i'm not gona redo this one but i will consider
the depth next time

[Brad]

for Hecq.

Although this belongs here