journal story (cont.)

[Gatsthedarksword]

ok i know i've asked in alot of places for feedback on the story i'm wrting in my journal but i figure this will probably get more replies than i have so far. what do you think? tell me if you like it or want a different story line or if you want a character in the damn thing just tell me cause this is after all your guys story, do something with it, shape it a little, don't give me all the freedom to write a bad story you guys hate