Could This Work?

[Doodleplex]

I wonder if this would work as a good song for a Deathnote AMV. To be exact it's something I sort of just wrote after watching another AMV. I just wonder if it'd be overkill...because a lot of the Deathnote AMVS I see are sort of dramatic. =/

Death around me like falling glass
Ghosts haunt me and say I won't last
Demons run and laugh in my face
My life they mean to erase

Blind hope, blind trust
Will friendship
Make my blood rust
Blind vision, blind ideals
You mean to kill
What currently heals

And now
I wish I could breath
But some how
It's taken from me
And now
I wish I could scream
But some how
I can't even speak

You who are the prince of dying
You who are the lord of lying
You who I blindly believed
You, a smile without a soul

Absolute corrupted soul
Never again to be whole
The day you died was the day
You gained the power
To throw my life away

A sharper pain, a bloody knife
Cuts into my just started life
As I die, I close my eyes
As I die, I see you smile and falsely cry

And now
I wish I could breath
But some how
It's taken from me
And now
I wish I could scream
But some how
I can't even speak

You who are the prince of dying
You who are the lord of lying
You who I blindly believed
You, a smile without a soul
You killer insanity
You killer
Killer...of me.

Lame much? If it's too much so I'll just toss it. =/ (And yes, I can sing well thanks lol)

[Kevmaster]

Imho, it could work, but it's too dramatic for me. I always thought of DN more on an insane/crazy way and no Despair (and thats what these lyrics express to me).

[xexyzl]

According to my 1337 google searching skills, this song doesn't exist.

[NS]

According to my 1337 google searching skills, this song doesn't exist.

You should learn to read. I believe he said he wrote it himself.

Also, Anything CAN work for anything.