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by Kalium » Fri Jun 06, 2008 6:17 pm
This video has a few issues, I think. First, the text. You spent a good twenty seconds on the text. It was obviously meant as a narrative device, but I found it somewhat on the confusing side. Second, the use of Ushio and the garbage-bot. I get it because I know a decent amount about Clannad, but I doubt everyone else will know what you're doing there. The in-video link wasn't really clear to me.
I can't tell how tightly plotted this is supposed to be. There's a clear shift between beginning and end, but chunks of the middle are all fuzzy. A lot like a dream, come to think of it...
In that case, well done. There's a very dream-like quality to this, somehow. There is, after all, truth in dreams.
