... Oh, my.
Only bit of constructive criticism I have: if you are using Premiere 6.5 or older, make sure you uncheck the "Deinterlace when speed is below 100%" in the Field Options of any clip you slow down. The jaggedness in certain parts of the first segment looked like they were due to this.
Also, the girl's voice in the second segment could have been boosted a little.
But that was a very nice idea.
