Other than that - yea, I looked over the vid and you certainly weren't too harsh. I was definitely starting lapse into the 'cool action is good because it syncs well to the beat' mode towards the ending (which reminded me of what was going on in the middle of 'Wasteland' at times).
In that case... my current idea is take the bit from about 3:27 and add a segment about Yu's past, which should work for taking out some excess action and adding a profiling dimension.
In that case, the titles could be something like...
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(before the beginning) Far away, at the crossroads of the world / lies a mountain / which holds the world's greatest secrets / Ararat
(the first travelling segment) To reach it / a harsh road is to be travelled
(first fighting segment) To conquer it / there is much blood to be shed
(second travelling segment) To find it / continents must be crossed
(second fighting segment) To get there / there are many dangers to face
(the preparation/battle segment) To defend it / great enemies must be defeated...
(the ark-opening segment) To uncover the mystery / there is a door to be opened
(the not-yet-there segment that will tentatively feature something about Yu's past) To enter it / a man must face his greatest fears
(the final fight) To prevent destruction / there is an enemy to defeat
(the end) But when the struggle ends / the secret hides itself once more / far away, at the crossroads of the universe
***
If I can make those appear in an effective fashion, I think it will make a much more interesting video. I mean, in the end, it's not fun when all you have to show for the work is another basic Spriggan video...
Tell me if you think that's a good or bad idea - harsh or not, it's all good when it results in a better vid
