New idea for a manga.

Lord Mardar · Post by **Lord Mardar** » Sun Jan 12, 2003 7:29 pm

Im trying to get a good storyline going for my midevil based manga im working on. tell me what you think of this story line. It has parts from the manga. Kinda reminds me of bastard.

Lord Mardar · Post by **Lord Mardar** » Sun Jan 12, 2003 7:32 pm

Take thee sword and thus doing so, slayeth your foe. Take to thou knowing and doeth thus right, not in mind nor in arms, know your enemy and take him well.

For the day of reconing is now! Do not trust another man, nor woman of sort. Do as told and you shall conquer, with not falling to the weak but prevailing past the strong!

For as youve known our lands are in great danger and many evils prevail, but you, you have what it takes to set us free young man, you know what is to be done!

So your journey begins, the forest spirit has taught you well and you have become filled with more knowledge, more strength, and more bravery than any man shall obtain. So head now, and conquer, take down the enemy, and obtain all goals, we will be waiting for your return, but untill that time arrives we shall do all we can to help your cause. Be off now.....and may the spirits guide you.

KLin · Post by **KLin** » Sun Jan 12, 2003 8:34 pm

First, I think you should stick to standard English if you don't want to greatly confuse your readers with improper grammar. Your medieval English was off at several points. For example, the first sentence:

Take thee sword and thus doing so, slayeth your foe.

Take thine sword and thus doing so, slay thy foe.

Second, this sampling of the dialogue seems to me to make it more akin to a video game RPG rather than BASTARD!

If you want good examples of medieval manga, I'd suggest reading Ragnarok and Record of Lodoss Wars. If you want to add a lot more emotion, check out Violinist of Hameln. Ragnarok and Violinist of Hameln certainly don't have any medieval English in it. God knows the SD Gundam Knight series sure as heck don't.[/quote]