[WIP] Angel Beats! AMV

[Gameurs]

Hiho guys

Let me introduce my new AMV, actually i just do only 30sec of the entire vid, but i want some feedback before i go on this way

Anime used : Angel Beats!
Software : Sony Vegas/AfterEffect/Photoshop
Music : Angel beats! BGM pv6
About the video : HD 720p, 29,7 fps
The link : http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nBs_AS1yksM&hd=1

Plz watch it in HD 720p, and give me your feedback =)

[Moonlessnight]

Nice start. Avoid lip-flap (having people talk in the amv when it isn't to the music) and you should do very well. The encode is gorgeous!

[Gameurs]

A finally a feedback =p
Yep, right for the lip-flap, will take care of it

[AimoAio]

The beginning seems awfully slow to me, I mean 20 seconds for "Angel Beats" to come up? Maybe you could make that faster and add other text to it? Like amv name, song title, artist..etc etc.

Lip flap. Something you can fix easy

Hmm and I dunno if it's just me but it feels kinda static to me. The scenes don't have much movement when the song begins to pick up a bit, perhaps a faster pacing? Or more scenes? Some panning won't hurt either Something like that.

That being said, I'm looking forward to seeing it finished

[Gameurs]

Actually i upload another teaser on youtube, but i make private just for a mate, if you want i can allow you to watch it, i've add a lots of thing, some flourish, some stuff like that =)

[AimoAio]

Sure, go ahead ^^ sounds good to me

[Gameurs]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2vuOCO48mhQ

Here we go =)

[Magnus]

Personally I think your pacing is way off. like really, first the introduction "Angels Beat!"-text. Then the still of the girl just standing there.
I'd advice you to try to pay more attention to the way the song progresses and try to make the video progress along with it.

This is not meant in a bad way at all, even though it might have sounded a little harsh.
These are my personal opinions and thoughts, if you'd agree take it to heart, if you don't - well, just leave it be.

Good luck!

[Gameurs]

Yup i agree with you for the first girl, for the text Angel Beats actually it's changed, you will see.
But for the first girl, i don't know to do to add some action to this scene really :/
If someone have an idea, plz go!

[AimoAio]

Sorry for the late reply, had work today x__x

Yup i agree with you for the first girl, for the text Angel Beats actually it's changed, you will see.

looking forward to seeing some changes to that.

And nice you got rid of the lip flap but the girl is waaay too static, it's like you only want the viewers to focus on the background where the bubble things are moving instead of on her but it doesn't quite work. My suggestion is to either: add camera movement - shaking? some panning? anything that makes it move, even slightly OR cut out the mask and add scene overlays underneath it(like sync scenes of the girl to the music there)

In fact you could even try both

Actually I'd say that for the next 2 characters too. They're not as still as the girl because they have shorter screentime but it still feels kinda slow to me in comparison with the music cause the music is kinda fast.

The bit after where the other characters come up...hmmm.....the effect is nice but I don't like how you feathered the masks - too much imo. And for some of the characters it looked like you used the cookie cutter instead of a mask which makes it look kinda....strange. Either keep it all masks or all cutters, and less feathering please. Also that area still feels kinda bland. Perhaps you could use the full scene of the mask in the background and just lower the opacity? Anything to lessen the white background would suffice.

I think your main problem is you're too focused on pretty effects(not that I don't like them ) and less on the pacing so it LOOKS nice but FEELS slow.

But otherwise the tune is kinda growing on me and I'm really looking forward to seeing more!

That also reminds me I gotta go watch Angel beats first