That text has gotta be changed, it's to large and the Font format/style doesn't really fit the tone of the music and amv. Olde English or something more eclectic looking would be better for what you're doing with your AMV. Big, white, block like text, just doesn't work.
The synch was good and even though I really disliked Gunslinger girl, you managed to make it look more interesting than it really is. Some more FX on a few of the shootouts would give it some extra punch/drama. Overall it was an easy watch and worth re-watching, the text is the only glaring fix that has to be made imo.