Being frankly honest, it's not great.
You have an interesting concept. But a lot of things are dragging it down. The FULL 1:30 intro to Stars is one thing. I almost stopped watching right then.
Then you have to look at the music. It's very quiet, very mellow, and has the same kind of pacing throughout the entire piece. There isn't a lot of build or conflict, and no real climax or denoument. (Which I think I mispelled)
When this is taken in combination with your concept, which essentially (though I did look at your story in the info) is a five minute summeration of the last...seven or so minutes of the end of the Neherenia arc of Stars, the video becomes even slower. The source footage is poor, and though you kept the subtitles in to tell the 'story' you end up making the audience focus on the subtitles and the story far more than the editing and the music.
What you essentially did was take out the audio for the scene and add in a new BGM track- something that's almost ignored at points because the viewer is watching the 'show' not a video.
While I do think it's an interesting idea, and I can see where you have edited the video to match the music, the final product feels like one long scene laid overtop of a music track and exported.
You might not like, or agree with this opinion, but realistically, this is why your star rating is so low.
Sorry for being so brutally honest, but I feel if you're confident enough to ask for an opinion (Especially on the wrong forum thread) you can handle a little honesty.
Besides. You dared me.
~Amanda