Haha! I liked that, but my initial impressions are it probably wouldn't work ^^ The way they're talking only really works in the context of someone obviously trying to act, and that doesn't translate well into anime, because most characters look more exaggerated by default. The only way I could see it working is if the characters' pupils were animated to look like they were reading something below/above the screen like they are in the clip. There may be other ways, but that's the only thing that comes to mind. With the lack of graffiti, this'd be a clip I'd cut down the audio because its jokes are kind of far between, so the clip could get boring pretty quick if it's not sped up. Usage of a badass character like Kusanagi as the female cop would be potentially amusing, since someone as cool as Kusanagi reading a script like that makes me chuckle just thinking about it.
Some potential there, but definitely requires a lot of work to make it work.