FadingSundown: it is much better now, but I think you could still change the funny scene at the beginning to something else, and maybe you oculd still put more scenes instead of using one but using a black fade and then making the scene black and white

try to use more scenes, and also, the mask at about 0:07 is a it too happy? it's not really happy but it doesn't give the feeling that it is serious either, so maybe you could replace that with something else?