It helps to upload your video to the sites database.
http://www.animemusicvideos.org/members ... _step0.phpLet's start with your dynamics, your song isn't to heavy but there are parts that it gets intense. When those parts come you want to place fast moving and hardcore clips with flashes and hard cuts so that you can get your viewer pumped, It's an action AMV after all. Next when your in those soft moody parts of the song you want to setup some slower more elegant scenes to get your viewer in the mood. Using cross fades and blackouts like you did really helps this aspect. When you make an AMV you want a story or theme that your viewers can latch on to. For example since the song I Will Not Bow goes well with the theme of the humans rising against the titans so you paint the picture that the people of this city, instead of just laying around on their asses, stand up to this greater power.You don't want a video with clips mixed in with some music, you want to get the person interested in what your creating. For a first there is a lot of potential, keep at it and I'm sure you'll improve.