by post-it » Wed May 15, 2013 3:37 am
.. I don't follow the story but grasp the concept.
AMV's used to be taught in 10 second shorties,
"how much understanding of a situation can you grasp of what I'm trying to display" kinda thing.
yours seemed odd right from the start: then a girl joins in, then she is falling,
then she reaches for him twice during the same fall, finally -- she dis-approves,
he's broken the sward but "she's not there" and another girl crystal-izes and <<Poof>> shes' gone T__T
... ... did I miss anything? ... ...
1) The song is fine ( I don't care for it myself ) but, it works well with you construction. ^__^
2) there needs to be a reason for this "anger" to be happening.
3) there needs to be "something that Triggered the Action which unfolds." {{ this ones usually a tough-one to present! }}
and
4) its your choice as to "how it ends" or "how it didn't End in an Acceptable Conclusion."
AMV's don't need to tell a story, The Anime Itself Is Already Bizarre Enough As Is!
What an AMV can do is "fill-in" the Gaps -or- Explain the "Why It Happened" point of view.
Finally, you've got the right idea ... however ... once a sward is drawn, you normally have a split second to live:
a sward fight is not fought on the run! .. .. "When is the last time you ever saw a Cop Running down the
freeway as fast as they can -- holding a machine-gun for miles without firing it and nobody seems to notice it" ?? T__T
That was the feeling I got from your AMV ... a complete lack of "why" this had to happen.
-- just a thought ^__^