Welcome to the org! Gave it a look, and overall, it makes first-time mistakes, but still had some good things about it too.
First of all, the visual quality is very blocky. Even on the highest Youtube setting, it was blocky and pixelated. Also had a watermark, which you should really consider cropping out in the future.
Editing wise, you should think more carefully about scene selection in the future. There were good sections to itthat really matched the lyrics of the video. Like :39-:42 or :53-:53, 2:49-3:30 or 1:01-1:03. Matched the mood and lyrics of the song well. Other scenes really didn't fit in (like the scene of her opening the train door with her fist), or didn't match the feeling of the song. Scenes also ran long and were repeated frequently (the scene of them eating together in the dark felt very repeated and overused). Try cutting it down into more manageable chunks and use more scenery. Also check the transitions of the video. See how at 2:33-2:34 it goes from a very dramatic dark scene to a very light static scene? It's harsh on viewers to have such a change in dynamic that quickly. Try and keep pace with the video's music and scene movement.
Overall though, you hit the mood of the song still, and that counts for a lot.
Give this guide
a read-over, it's a helpful guide for first timers.