irriadin wrote:Not brad for a first. A decent encapsulation of the series. Here's what you can work on in your next video:
* Don't let scenes linger for too long. Don't be afraid to cut more, use more scenes, etc. This is particularly true in action videos. For example, 00:26 with the kid crying (other examples would be 1:06, 1:15)? It would still serve its purpose if it was half the length.
* What's the theme? The first minute is all about Scar and the Ishvallans, but then it turns into Mustang, and then it quickly devolves into "let's just show all the cool scenes in FMA:B." It cheapens the impact of your video. Choose an idea and stick with it.
* There seems to be little rhyme or reason to the flow of scenes within each of the segments. Why are we seeing the Fuhrer's death scene intersected with the Kimblee fight on the train? Each clip should be a logical progression from the previous one, and should serve a purpose in the grand scheme of your video. Especially if the attempt is a more drama-ish action video.
* Most of the time the sync is pretty weak. It's competent at best (apart from 1:02, that was cool)? Lyric sync is all well and good, but you have to do more than just that. More scenes like 1:02!
Hopefully that helps. Keep at it!
Alright, first: Thank you very much for the feedback. It will help me a lot for the next one!
I do realize what you mean by many of the scenes being too long.
The Avatar Music Video I have planned next is an action video, so I'll take your advice, and that of others who told me the same thing, and use many more cuts.
I did have a theme. (I do understand that there is no purpose if the video didn't get it through and I have to explain it, but I let you know what I was trying) It was meant to be a video showing three characters from FMA:B rising up from a hopeless situation to meet a great challenge. Scar was going around extracting revenge, but he rose up to fight for the Amestrians, that's why when the song said "I Will Not Bow, etc." I showed him fighting against the real villains, Bradly and Kimblee. The second verse transissioned to Mustand rising up from losing all of his men and getting revenge on Envy, to letting Envy go and fighting against Father. The last bit was meant to show Ed in many hopeless situations, but going against them and defeating all the villains, including Father.
I also like 1:02, so I'll go for more like you said.
Don't worry, I'll be sure to keep at it, and thanks again for the help!